My ghazal #1...?

For a first attempt it's okay. You've got a lot of mundane word choices in here, and with a form like a ghazal word choice is fairly critical, so you should find alternatives to "dark," "heart," and "soul" if possible. In addition to the comment about the couplets should stand on their own... they really should be individual poems, not connected in a linear fashion to the others. So linear, narrative story telling is a bit tough to do with this form. In addition, you should think perhaps in how you can mix up the end words, like if your choice had allowed you to use a nym or if you had use "ight sky" so you would have variables like "right sky, tight sky, light sky, slight sky, etc, etc.